How much weight do I carry
all the way to my cranium
all the weight of the worlds’ pretence
losing my way in my head
Taking it all so seriously
to believe that a poem needs structure
that it needs rhyme to stay sane
when it all really needs is emotion
and an intuition to guide it
All it needs is a semblance of truth
and for a captive reader to decipher it
All you need is an escape from your life
and these words to form a safe haven
But ironically it reminds you
A vacation is futile
if you return to familiar problems
with the same escapist solutions
It reminds us
that our world needs fixing
and not this incomplete poem or rhyme
I love this a lot!
Thank you 💫
Structure is only, in my learning and reflection, as interesting for what it defies doing. You just nailed it. I call this nuance. Ex. Typical poem AABBCC etc. You were using themes instead of rhymes and that’s what I do. Much more interesting imo. Also theoughing in some XYyZz with unique word choice or tone is my thing. People find that way more compelling… I mean I do. Great!
Thank you for the detailed comment!
Thank you for helping me how to continue to see the world positively and appreciate what is. The things we see: are ourselves? A world blind to this is a place I’ve sheltered and weather a storm. Rookie of every hour. Sage of each
Dance of c on flicT.
What I do you help me be: the only way. Friend of my core self, when poetry happens: it is and sees itself.
Oh, I’m not done yet. You inspired me and I’m linking to your post if that’s alright. I’m explaining what it means to me: that was the first poem I read after I conquered 30 years of mental illness, so now I’m all emotional. Make it up to me if you want by letting me link to your post. Here’s my poem again with a brief introduction and explaination: https://mightbewrite.wordpress.com/2020/12/19/my-mental-illness-was-now-my-poetry-response/
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I always enjoy your poetry and never once have I been left disappointed! You inspire me!
Means a lot Tracy!
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