[582] Seeing The Unseen

I look at a peacock fly by the window, and I wait⁣⁣
His senior tells him to push harder⁣⁣
He pauses long before he replies⁣⁣
smiles before he sees me⁣⁣
enters the room so warmly⁣⁣
⁣⁣
He is negotiating with me⁣⁣
The number between us⁣⁣
like a question⁣⁣
neither of us wants to answer first⁣⁣
⁣⁣
Then he pauses⁣⁣
not from weakness⁣⁣
but from somewhere⁣⁣
The corporate boss cannot follow⁣⁣
⁣⁣
His eyes catch the peacock’s green
amidst the grey concrete towers⁣⁣
he comes back in a moment⁣⁣
that felt like eternity⁣⁣
to a room that forgot eternity existed⁣⁣
⁣⁣
We both look at each ⁣⁣
a connection we both can’t name⁣⁣
then he names his price⁣⁣
I say yes⁣⁣
before I know why⁣⁣

The peacock flew out of sight
only after we shook hands⁣
It had done its job⁣
We both saw the shrine⁣
⁣⁣


NaPoWriMo Day 17 – And now for our (optional) prompt! Sergio Raimondi’s poem, “Today Matsuo Basho Cooks,” plays on the following haiku by (you guessed it), Matsuo Basho:

Crimson pepper pod!
Add two pairs of wings, and look—
darting dragonfly.

For today’s challenge, write a poem in which you respond to a favorite poem by another poet.


My poem is a response to the silent monk of the mountains, where I meet the monk in a glimpse of shared moments. The poem is about the shared moment where we both notice something ethereal like a peacock flying in the cityscape.

One response to “[582] Seeing The Unseen”

  1. A new poet friend: Greg Valitchka
    “i have scars that look like wrinkles
    and wrinkles that look like scars…
    i have love that looks like despair
    and despair that looks like love
    embraces leap from a heart of gold
    into currents and canals
    into the flow of hope’s downstream”

    my response :
    i have eyes that look like pools
    and pools that look for eyes

    i have friends who look like foes
    and foes who look like friends

    confusion rears its ugly head
    confusion gives way to understanding
    eyes pool tears of understanding
    it’s what friends and foe need most

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